Some things demand to be remembered…
VisDare at Anonymous Legacy – 150 word story to accompany the visual prompt.
Memories rise up from the ground like vacant chairs, up from the graves of the deceased who long to return and compel you to remember. Shorn in somber grays, these sacred tombstone seats command your intimate attention.
They are like forgotten notes on a scale, sparsely played but still ever preying upon your emotions. They are oppressive; they demand that you remember them. They cleave until they exact every tonal moment of your life that you may have dissevered or dissociated, stolen or hidden from sight.
They are relentless. Stolid echoes on the hillside: the last remaining score of your symphonic chronology. They are the lingering refrains of your life’s music, your living concerto in which the audience has now all but departed, leaving only these intermittently interred chairs, and muted remembrances, the last tears from an opined violin, and the slow thumping of an opaque heart broken alongside some forgotten coda.
So very well written and beautiful thoughts woven throughout. I like how you worked greater detail of an orchestra throughout. I’m not musical but can tell you are. I’m so happy to read this excellent writing.
Thank you for your comments.
I’m not musical either so I am especially appreciative that you aren’t and I could sort of get “a pass” from you on the musical tones of this piece.
From the Chair Man
Randy I did like this, some memories to compel us (unless we age and we can’t). I loved your closing, well penned.
*we knew that…. 😉
Thank you… this prompt moved me so, and rather than going with humor, I tried to capture what it evoked in me – what it actually compelled me to write about from inside of me.
I love this way to express the life of music..
I like the statements you’ve made about humanity in your poem, and I’ve left some comments there, too.
Randy, I get something new out of this piece with every re-reading. Your use of language and analogy is wonderful.
thank you. I tried to have it have as much flow and depth and description as possible. I’ve rewritten it several times – and reposted it once.
BTW I liked your piece and left my comments there.
Randy, you know what a thrill it is to read your writing? I absolutely adore you when your funny and when your serious. You have a stunning talent.
Now, was that a Porsche you wanted or a Z – I’m sorry, my love, I can’t remember.
both please and a Mustang Shelby.
not too much to ask for… 😉
GORGEOUS. The use of musical imagery is absolutely peerless in this piece. Magnificently rendered and a worthy read. Thank you for sharing!!
Thanks. I appreciate your nice words.
Without seeming overly something-or-other, I did work hard at this one trying to create a piece that I felt was lyrical and captivating. Randy