The Sunday Whirl invites writers to write a poem or short prose using some or all of the “wordle’s” 12 words.
This week’s words are:
wordle 96
Jesus at a Doorway
A door: to
Adore some surly light.
A door that leads down;
Alight by candlelight.
Robed in naked faces;
Lacking in
Hope; walking barefoot, and
Hiding sin,
O’er gnarly and
tortured root s-
curries this
Imaginary
Creature
Bath’d, wrap’t, and hel’-
d in mordant night.
Where is God? Other
Than in this candlelight.
Where becomes birth, where
Can I be washed clean; where,
I cry as I roll away the rock, is
Rebirth?
Three times I ask as the cock crows.
Three times I have to ask.
Three times I yell.
Randy Mazie
wow – excellent, three times I declare.
thank you (x3)
Survival instinct does that to you…
I’m response-less…
Forgiveness and love are very powerful.
yes…
I very much like the format of your p-
oem.
🙂
janet
t-
hanks
r-and
y
Almost a rewritten accounting. Well done. Over at We Write Poems last week we were asked to write in the voice of an unsung character of a fairy tale…While slightly different, I think your piece qualifies.
My response to that prompt was:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2013/02/wwp-142-charmed-and-lucky-too.html
Thank you for your visit to my short verse piece. I have since used the Whirl words to add to my story verse (also on the blogspot site)
Nice!
Thanks!
Randy
Great job! I like how you used format to help create flow and emotion. Those last 3 lines are especially powerful.
Yes, I needed something powerful at the end…
Thanks,
Randy
The alliteration and repetition give this a nice poem. And, like some have already mentioned the format was clever!
Thank you. Thank you. Thank you.
And thanks for stopping by.
Randy
Okay, I don’t need to write my comments late at night. I meant “give this poem a nice flow” Thanks for not calling me out on the wonky sentence!
What you meant was so obvious – I hadn’t
even noticed the absence of the word “flow”.
It was not even a flaw; it flew right passed me
flowly and surely
😉
Randy