Lillie Mcferrin posts a “Five Sentence Fiction” prompt.
This week it is: TIME
To You, My Love, To You
Midnight is a long way off, and I’m still not sure if she will show.
How I even arrived here is a mystery, dressed as I am, as if I were still waiting for her outside that stage door after her first starring role behind those bright lights of her dreams.
Time has a way of floating by, yet funny how this raft is tethered here in place.
Years ago we swam on a misty green night like this, and made chilled wet love, hard on wood boards just like these, and time seemed an eternity for us that night as we pulsed like seconds into each other’s arms.
You have played your sweet roles on all the stages of life; and I wait for you, here, like all the other nights, for your return to your most wonderful role, nay, make that our next best performance together, rapt here in misty love and timeless admiration.
The first time around it was imperceptible, the shift in tense. Will she show? I have my doubts.
Thanks for commenting Paul. I’m not even sure that he is there.
It is meant as imperception, a Monet word impressionist painting, a light dabbing of words – and senses.
I think you caught the very essence of the photograph, even down to the ‘misty green night’. Excellent Randy, melancholic, nostalgic, hopeful all in one. Good one.
What a nice comment to write that I was able to capture the very essence of the photograph. That meant a lot to me. I strove for that in sitting and trying to put into words my felt sense about the picture.
Dreamy and ethereal.
I see this as the end of life, lovers somehow reuniting after. But I may just be cold and wet.
Love this line: time seemed an eternity for us that night as we pulsed like seconds into each other’s arms.
Thank you for your descriptive comments. They are much appreciated.
It was an “end of life” sense I wrote about. You may be cold and wet (I don’t know you at all), but you were correct in your sensing the story line.
By the way – although the concepts were at odd with each other – I like the way it felt to write too:
“time seemed an eternity for us that night as we pulsed like seconds into each other’s arms.”
This was beautifully written, I loved the feel, and the sense of time and distance you conveyed!
Thank you for your “sensed” comments. That was what it was all about.
Gosh. This was beautiful.
I felt that way too. Thanks.